Antigone Cadmus

As promised! Scorpius sighed as he extracted himself from his blankets, outside the sky spoke of the twilight. Divide this into two sentences. I'm also not a fan of "the ...

ZOMG LIEK HOW CAN YOU MAKE FUN OF TWILIGHT??? No, no really, thank you! Thank God for you other Stephanie Meyer haters out there! I swear I am the only ...

Part three! Onto the review... the Nazi’s The Nazis aren't possessing anything here. Change to Nazis. Baby Evette Is not a baby anymore. Isn't she about five? I couldn’t find ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS! This was...entertaining. I don't feel like nit-picking today, so I'll just do some hints: 1.) This should be posted in scripts. Is it supposed to be ...

Lukas-kun! Time to review! One off the groups member's turned around. You need an apostrophe in groups. Should be "group's" "The zombies.." Comma instead of two periods. "Oh yeah.. no" ...

As promised! trying not to glance down at the scene below. You never explain what the "scene below" is. Some are small, some are slightly larger than normal. Replace the ...

Hey, Amniel! Was this supposed ti be a Fanfic? Of what? Anyway... travellers One l. You do this many times, every single time you write traveler. I'll only correct it ...

Hey, Daydream! I really liked your prologue. *jumps for joy* Chapter 1! Onto the review: “’Oo want’a keep ‘our job, eh? Your characters little cockney accents are really beginning to ...

As promised, Selene! there were no police to tell me no The word no becomes repetitive. Perhaps, "There were no police to tell me otherwise." This could be a good ...

Hi, Indigo! Welcome to YWS! It's a great place to get critique for your writing, so you should return the favor! Before you post your own work, you should have ...

*sigh* Saying this is going to make me feel very nerdy, but I feel I must... Falador is a town in Runescape! Yes, I used to play Runescape. If you ...

This was extremely good! It leaves the reader hanging and wanting more. I would enjoy reading more. I really didn't find any errors. Well… how about a little music?" He ...

Hey Vox! You're named after your character, eh? ^_^ I just wanted to say that in Latin, nihil is an indeclinable noun. Therefore, I don't think it could be put ...

You're Amniel's brother! Lovely! Onto the critique! We had always before went home together. This is worded awkwardly. I would rewrite it as "Before, we had always gone home together." ...

Hey, Rosey! I really enjoyed this piece. *cracks knuckles* Now we review! a gray pearl I dunno. This bothers me. I picture gray us being lackluster and dull, not pear-like. ...